First Model Shoot

[clos]

I got myself a willing amatuer model and did my first model shoot. Comments, critiques most welcomed...

http://ompi.onemodelplace.com/OMP_Images/Photographer/52286/52286_p_F092D687-E357-5049-F7582BC3F2BB0537.jpg

http://ompi.onemodelplace.com/OMP_Images/Photographer/52286/52286_p_F0945CD9-D2B0-F763-974A4241847DA6C8.jpg

-Clos

[ecobo]

I like the overal look of the photos, but don't like the rose vest of the model. It would be better if it was some darker color. A wet white t-shirt would be a big advance. :lol:

[clos]

Ecobo,

Yeah your right I was going for fashion/glamour and the top was certainly not fashionable. I like the color though and a wet top was not what I was going for but thanks for the advice.

It doesn't seem from the response that anybody else cares one way or the other. I would love to here from those with model experience how I can improve. Anybody out there willing to help?

-Clos

[ecobo]

Your photos are nice. Just keep posting, but try to give some more attractive name of your topic. You will take much more critiques.
Regards!

[dphoto]

Hello Clos,

I'm an amatuer myself, but I'll give you some input anyhow. I think the makeup, lighting, and background are all great. This is important since lighting can be a real pain. You did a good job with that! :) On the not-so-good side, the first picture looks a bit out of focus to me. Also, I think I would prefer to see both eyes. In the second shot, the top of the model's head is, in my opinion, not that appealing. For this particular shot, you could crop it, and if you had the chance to do it again, you could have her look up at you.

Anyhow, overall the shots look pretty good (the lighting is great, but that blur is a killer) and I think you have real potential! :)

-Deva

[ahmadof]

i too am still an amature, so take this for what it is worth. i like the lighting.. for me this is one of the hardest parts. the crop on the first pic bothers me, i think we should see at least both eyes if not more. the crop on the second also cuts off her right arm which is distracting. i agree that the top of her head doesn't add much. also, i'm sure you are just working with what you have, but the back of the chair is too wide. it indents her thighs too much. good start , i'd liket o see more.

[charlesu]

I got myself a willing amatuer model and did my first model shoot. Comments, critiques most welcomed...
-Clos

In order to critique, it is important to know the purpose of the images and the intended audience. This shot is intended for a mature audience as glamour or possibly lingerie marketing for (and in) a boutique. I sometimes photograph new inventory for a local store and they use my images to help feature the items. So, for something like this the target audience is supposed to want to buy the outfit to feel sexy/glamourous or to buy the outfit for a friend/spouse.

http://ompi.onemodelplace.com/OMP_Images/Photographer/3661/3661_p_8DCDF5F7-B9CA-9D03-B0A95EAF6C240D5A.jpg

[clos]

Charles,

You are absolutely correct. I have recently joined onemodelplace.com and the purpose of this shoot was to make the model look good. Since I am new I am starting off with newer (amatuer) models that are looking to expand their portfolio. So one of my intents is to serve that purpose. Personaly, I am using this time to get control over the lighting, gaining experience, getting better and learn to work with models. By the way your portfolio is great. Any more advice would be greatly welcome since you now know my intent. Expand my portfolio at onemodel place and go from there.

Ahmadof,

Yep the chair is to wide, it was the only chair I had on set. I will post more soon, thanks for the props.

dpphoto,
Well, the head is in focus but I should have used a wider aperature to get the rest of her. It's not as bad as it looks here, it is intentionally softened albeit a little too much. Thanks for the words.

ecobo,
what would be a more attractive name?

Thanks all, don't mean to drag this out but any other suggestions are greatly welcome. I have another swimwear pic with another model next week and would like to make the shoot as productive as possible.

Some suggestions on backdrop, since the grey is getting old would be welcome. The shoot is at night so it makes it even more difficult.

Thanks.

-Clos

[charlesu]

Any more advice would be greatly welcome since you now know my intent. Expand my portfolio at onemodel place and go from there.

Keep shooting and look hard at your images. You are your own best critic. And don't take criticism personally. If you post and ask for feedback (or even if you don't), people will judge your work and sometimes say harsh things. Consider what they say carefully and see if there is something of value.

I sometimes find that well-intentioned advice comes from novices who are just learning the rules or those who feel that the rules should be LAW (you must obey the rule of thirds, you must have eye contact in your portrait, etc.). Unfortunately, sometimes these people miss the impact of the image. They literally can't see the forest for the trees. It's not an excuse to be sloppy or ignorant of the rules, but a good photographer knows the rules and how to use them. He or she also knows how and when to break them.

Look at other people's work. What works in their images? What doesn't? What's overdone, cliche, or just old? What's fresh and new? What's the emotional impact? How does the image make you feel? How did they accomplish that? What is the mood? The pose, the lighting, the editing? Did they break a rule, two, three? Which rules and does it matter or does the image work better because they broke those rules? Which rules do they never break? Pretty soon you will be able to reconstruct great images. Not to copy them, but to have more tools at your disposal.

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