Model Shoot #1

[shafiq]

What do you guys think...like it or dislike it?

http://karsh.usefilm.com/images/1/6/2/7/1627/416544-large.jpg

I will post somemore later.

Comments appreciated.

Thx

[PeterS45]

You're close to success. I would get rid of the distracting bushes at the right and would like to see the left hand in the picture. But the rest is OK for me :) .

[peter/c]

Nice shot except, as the other Peter said, for the missing digits.
Peter.

[karusel]

Agreed. Best shots i.e. covershots are usually very simple, not too many things there, no distractions, also nothing a viewer would miss, an illustrative example would be a large aperture macro of a flower, with all else heavily blurred, so no distractions.

[shafiq]

Nice shot except, as the other Peter said, for the missing digits.
Peter.

hmm...kinda hard to do anything about the missing digits now :roll:

[Bruce Hamilton]

hmm...kinda hard to do anything about the missing digits now :roll:
You did post in the critique forum, and you did ask for comments... Don't shoot the messenger if you don't like the message.

[PeterS45]

hmm...kinda hard to do anything about the missing digits now :roll:
You did post in the critique forum, and you did ask for comments... Don't shoot the messenger if you don't like the message.

I don't think that's what Shafiq ment to say and I don't think he's 'shooting' anybody, that's not the way I feel it anyway :lol: .

[Radtech1]

Nice shot except, as the other Peter said, for the missing digits.
Peter.

hmm...kinda hard to do anything about the missing digits now :roll:

Could cone tighter.

Top = Cut the text in half - that way we are not distracted by trying to read it.

Rt = Crop to inside the edge of the bricks. Let the viewer think that the wall goes on forever

Lt = Crop to somewhere mid shaft on the forarm. About where the N is on the word SUNDAY

Bottom = Crop just above the skirt. Just as you let the viewer think the wall continued on the Rt Side, let him think that her skin goes on uninterrupted as far down as the imagination will take.

I am at work and cant do these to see how they look, but I am willing to bet that if you try that, the issue of missing digits will be a moot point.

Rad

[shafiq]

hmm...kinda hard to do anything about the missing digits now :roll:
You did post in the critique forum, and you did ask for comments... Don't shoot the messenger if you don't like the message.

I don't think that's what Shafiq ment to say and I don't think he's 'shooting' anybody, that's not the way I feel it anyway :lol: .

No harm was meant. I like the critiques...makes me think before I take a picture. I guess that is the idea right!!!!

[jasonco]

Hi Shafiq,

I think the photo is ok, but I think you could do more with the models expression.

Try motivating her more. A half smirk would have looked great.

Check out

http://www.melissacore.com/MelCore_06.jpg
http://www.melissacore.com/MelCore_03.jpg

For some ideas... also check out my site www.jasoncolephotography.com.au fr some posing ideas.

I think your on the right track, you just need to get osme mroe feeling into the model... give her some more "S" ...

"S" is when they poke them bum out and boobs out and form a nice sexy S shape... the magazinbes love it.. if you want to shoot comercially then this is the way to do it...

Cheers
Jason

[shafiq]

Hi Shafiq,

I think the photo is ok, but I think you could do more with the models expression.

Try motivating her more. A half smirk would have looked great.

Check out

http://www.melissacore.com/MelCore_06.jpg
http://www.melissacore.com/MelCore_03.jpg

For some ideas... also check out my site www.jasoncolephotography.com.au fr some posing ideas.

I think your on the right track, you just need to get osme mroe feeling into the model... give her some more "S" ...

"S" is when they poke them bum out and boobs out and form a nice sexy S shape... the magazinbes love it.. if you want to shoot comercially then this is the way to do it...

Cheers
Jason

I looked at your site and definately a learning experience. I will try and see if some of the poses can be replicated. Thanks

[jasonco]

Sure, send me some pics when you do them.. always keen to help :-)

[shafiq]

You're close to success. I would get rid of the distracting bushes at the right and would like to see the left hand in the picture. But the rest is OK for me :) .

Is this a better crop?

http://newton-i.usefilm.com/1/6/6/3/1663/425959-large.jpg

[timmyquest]

If sexy is what your going for thats about 200% BETTER

[shafiq]

If sexy is what your going for thats about 200% BETTER

I think the idea behind the original portrait was to give it a 'sexy' look and feel. So good to hear you think so too.

What is it about the picture this time around that makes it more acceptable?

Thanks for your comments.

[Josh]

you dont have that space on the right in this one.....looks much better this way

[Radtech1]

This is the crop that I might choose

http://home.ripway.com/2004-2/78486/Canon/416544-large.jpg

[shafiq]

This is the crop that I might choose

http://home.ripway.com/2004-2/78486/Canon/416544-large.jpg

I am confused. I thought everyone critisized the fact that the hand was chopped-off!!!

[Radtech1]

Yes, the crop which includes her left hand is better. When I posted this one, that one was not loading. I was assuming that the first image was all that there was, and I was working on that.

[shafiq]

Yes, the crop which includes her left hand is better. When I posted this one, that one was not loading. I was assuming that the first image was all that there was, and I was working on that.

np :D

[jukas]

Is this a better crop?

http://karsh-i.usefilm.com/1/6/6/0/1660/425160-large.jpg

I tend to notice the little things in photographs and the wedding ring in this image kills it for me. You obviously have her posed in an inviting, sensual/sexy way. Unless this was a photoshoot specifically for her husband the ring kills the appealing parts of the image for me.

[shafiq]

Is this a better crop?

http://newton-i.usefilm.com/1/6/6/3/1663/425959-large.jpg

I tend to notice the little things in photographs and the wedding ring in this image kills it for me. You obviously have her posed in an inviting, sensual/sexy way. Unless this was a photoshoot specifically for her husband the ring kills the appealing parts of the image for me.

Ring. What ring! :D

[cmM]

Okay, here's the rule of the thumb I apply to cropping. BTW, this comes from serious photographers, not regular failures like me :oops:

Never ever crop near or at a joint. Always search to crop towards the middle of a limb.
The first pic had just the hand chopped off, right next to her wrist....
The second one was cropped better, but I would keep a little more of the image towards the right to place the subject a little closer to the middle...just a bit.

That's what I think (not to be confused with professional advice :wink: ....except for the "cropping rule")