Senior Photos

[PhotographerS]

I am sending out a message to the local class of 2008.
So what do you think about the message. I am trying to use this as self AD / promo; however I would also like to use this as a way to help remind seniors to get them done for the yearbook, etc.

So what do you think, am I going about this correctly?:)

Please make any changes that you think would help!

Thanks Again

[dwarfmcdougal]

howdy, fellow yearbook photography editor! i just had my senior photos done a few weeks ago—the pro. and myself discussed various lenses and our 30D's. They were making him use a Nikon on site.

[nebular]

I didn't change any of the text, but I've edited some of the grammar/punctuation/spelling.

Good luck with your sales!

[PhotographerS]

That is much better. Thanks Again Nebular. I am using the edited version.
PDA's.... I can NEVER write good on them.
Thanks Again!

[MJPhotos24]

seniors should being preparing (shouldnt that be "be" and no being?)

YOU'RE CHEAP :P , but not to bad...to the point and not wordy which is a good thing, but it seems a bit choppy IMO. It doesn't flow very well but I think I might of lost some of it, my computers being idiotic right now and I believe a few parts of sentences were lost in the opening process. I want to get into senior pics a little more, doing a few girls I coach this year for $100 + print costs and pretty much the same you mentioned. Cheap compared to others in the area, but hey it's "my girls" :)

[PhotographerS]

seniors should being preparing (shouldnt that be "be" and no being?)

YOU'RE CHEAP :P , but not to bad...to the point and not wordy which is a good thing, but it seems a bit choppy IMO. It doesn't flow very well but I think I might of lost some of it, my computers being idiotic right now and I believe a few parts of sentences were lost in the opening process. I want to get into senior pics a little more, doing a few girls I coach this year for $100 + print costs and pretty much the same you mentioned. Cheap compared to others in the area, but hey it's "my girls" :)


Very true it should be "be". I fix it.
I will do a bit more editing, but then I'll be sending it out.
Thanks.

[XTshooter]

The phrase "every senior's last school year" is redundant. The fact that they're Seniors already implies that it's their last year in high school. And I agree on the pricing. I haven't seen your work, but I'd bet you could easily raise your rates without hearing too many complaints. It's usually not a good thing if everyone thinks you're the "cheap" photographer. I've found that if you have a few people say your prices are cheap, and a few saying you're too expensive, then you're probably in the right ballpark.