promotional flyer critique please

[michael_]

i had fun doing it :)

anyway its for an event i am shooting (with another tog) in november this flyer will go out with each CD and at the event in showbags.

http://www.mvettasphotography.com/circlework/print-promotion.jpg
Revision 2 - http://www.mvettasphotography.com/circlework/print-promotion2.jpg
Revision 3 - http://www.mvettasphotography.com/circlework/print-promotion3.jpg
Revision 8 - http://www.mvettasphotography.com/circlework/print-promotion8.jpg
Revision 9 - http://www.mvettasphotography.com/circlework/print-promotion9.jpg
let me know what you think

[PhotosGuy]

You'll have people there who don't have a clue as to what a A3 size is?

[michael_]

yeah thats on my list already to change to 12x18, other suggestions have been there is to much red

[Steve Parr]

I find the constant text-color change more than a bit distracting. I've always regarded that as something to be done for emphasis, or so that the red words would convey a completely separate thought.

I'd tone that down a bit, change the reference to print size, and then distribute the Hell out of them...

[ryant35]

The text color change is fine for me, but using that instead of spaces makes it hard to read.

[michael_]

ok hows this revision

http://www.mvettasphotography.com/circlework/print-promotion2.jpg

[BaliHai]

Just a suggestion the yellow type in the body copy will be hard to read when printed you might want to change it to something else more reader friendly.

[ryant35]

The parts were the water mark in the background covers the text, it also makes it hard to read, but that just may be my screen.

Maybe move the background behind the text & pictures.

[michael_]

cheers guys

redid it completely

3rd revision http://www.mvettasphotography.com/circlework/print-promotion3.jpg

[ryant35]

Much better!! Very professional.

one more thing, the comma at the end of /lightbox may be confusing to anybody who is computer illiterate.

[michael_]

yeah its been bugging me too.

cheers ryan, this was my first flyer design and im rather impressed with myself haha, even though all it is is text :)

[ryant35]

You should be impressed, it looks good.

[michael_]

latest and probably final revision http://www.mvettasphotography.com/circlework/print-promotion8.jpg

[michael_]

decided to do abit of an event page too http://www.mvettasphotography.com/CWEVONats07/

[S.Horton]

This doesn't grab me with an offer I could accept in the 2 seconds you have to get me to read more.

When I do try to read more, I don't understand what I'd get amidst specific instructions about a website, for example.

Maybe it is just an American trait, but a strong, singular message about an offer needs to lead.

If there's a logo for the event, get permission, lead with it large atop the page, make me a very specific offer.

By way of fictional example only --

"FREE 12x18 PRINT WITH CD PURCHASE OF SHOW PHOTOS (raise price to support it)"

For a limited time, we're offering a free 12x18 print to anyone who purchases a CD-ROM filled with a complete set of photos of this event. Your car, full-sized, in full [bla bla] color!

Order today by visiting http://alsdjflajfalkjlkjfds

Ask about our premium package of custom posters, too. We can add any text, even your signature, to create a full-size frame-ready poster....... (the upsell)

[michael_]

i see your point sam, i have a few week still so will revise it some more.

[S.Horton]

^^ Congrats on getting the opportunity. Good luck!

[michael_]

Revision 9 - http://www.mvettasphotography.com/circlework/print-promotion9.jpg

made some changes , much simpler

[S.Horton]

......there ya go.

Go sell 'em.

[rcheung07]

Forget the ad. I think you should work on your website. As a web designer, way too many clicks into new browser windows. That's a no, no. Looks nice though.

[michael_]

which website
?

[Yeoer]

Is your size correct.... 12x18' ... thats 12 feet by 18 feet... !!!

[rcheung07]

http://www.mvettasphotography.com/
clicked on the MB logo
http://www.mvettasphotography.com/site/about/
clicked on galleries
From here these gallery links go to a new window. ( I see the grafiti doesn't but the other 2 do)

[TeeJay]

Is your size correct.... 12x18' ... thats 12 feet by 18 feet... !!!

On the subject of size (:rolleyes:) - not wishing to be picky, but your original add stated "A3", and you then changed it to 18" x 12" - when A3 is in fact only 16 1/2" x 11 5/8" -

Are you actually getting these printed 18" x 12", as some people might be disappointed if they get an undersized product.

You might be better off simply calling it 16" x 11"?

Just my thoughts.

TJ

[michael_]

Is your size correct.... 12x18' ... thats 12 feet by 18 feet... !!!

18x12 inches not feet

http://www.mvettasphotography.com/
clicked on the MB logo
http://www.mvettasphotography.com/site/about/
clicked on galleries
From here these gallery links go to a new window. ( I see the grafiti doesn't but the other 2 do)

Its only a temp site while my new one is being developed so at present im not to concerned, new site will have minimal galleries and at most 8 images per gallery max 3-4 galleries and will all be embedded

On the subject of size (:rolleyes:) - not wishing to be picky, but your original add stated "A3", and you then changed it to 18" x 12" - when A3 is in fact only 16 1/2" x 11 5/8" -

Are you actually getting these printed 18" x 12", as some people might be disappointed if they get an undersized product.

You might be better off simply calling it 16" x 11"?

Just my thoughts.

TJ

The prints are 18x12' inches, i changed it from A3 to remove confusion, hell i dont even know the actual size of A3 :) till now

[Yeoer]

18x12 inches not feet
The prints are 18x12' inches, i changed it from A3 to remove confusion, hell i dont even know the actual size of A3 :) till now

The ' = Feet... "= inch The ' after the 12 (as in 18x12' ) tells everyone the size is in feet...

[michael_]

fair enough, i have never used feet so never picked up on it, consider it changed.