Broken home

[Mitchkitter]

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v96/Mitchkitter/The%20bucket/Broken-home480.jpg
Critque me till i go numb

[Big_B]

I'm just off out so don't have time to crit properly. However I did notice that the ends of his fingers are still in colour - its quite distracting.

[Mitchkitter]

thanks i'll fix that in the moring

[cmM]

the concept is very interesting and it tells a story... I don't know what else to remark...

[Mitchkitter]

Fixed the fingers on the above shot..... Tryed a spot light lighting, i dunno if i like it or not

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v96/Mitchkitter/The%20bucket/Broken-home-color-spotlight.jpg

[LaurentiuB]

The focus should be on the broken picture, I think...

[jojo77]

i don't think his expression matches what you are trying to portray. should have made him look down or at least some sad emotion.

[dsze]

....just something I'd try... spot light & focus on the broken home and have him hold it out slightly (creating more distance to his face) and with a wide open apert. blur his face and have it in the shadows... so that the face is much less the focus & is even a bit more mysterious and ambiguous...right now the face is telling a different story than than broken home... showcase the broken home and leave the face more to the imagination... maybe even closed eyes.... just something to try.

-daniel

[Mitchkitter]

Changed the self portrait
Took your advice, changed it a bit with PS
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v96/Mitchkitter/The%20bucket/Broken-home-colorDARK480.jpg

[MattSEG]

Too contrived, doesn't do it for me.

[dsze]

I like the new one better.... What exactly is your assignment/purpose here? What are you trying to say with this self-portrait?

-daniel

[Mitchkitter]

Mostly trying to create an emotional enviroment, leaving the viewer feeling eminsly sympathetic, and in some cases empathetic.

I've thaught about possibly replacing the ripped home picture, maybe with a "faimly" portrait, inside a broken frame <glass cracked>

It's not a pitty piece, yea, mostly just trying to "move" the viewer

[dsze]

I think that last one does a better job. It really leaves the identity to be imagined based on the broken home and the dark feeling

-daniel

[Big_B]

If it was me, I think I'd go for a more subtle approach. Perhaps have the photo in the background rather then so in your face.

[karusel]

Yes it is not subtle enough.

Also, the guy looks exactly like a hitchiker. Picture him holding a card saying 'anywhere'.

[Mitchkitter]

thanks for the comments