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Daytripper
10th of October 2004 (Sun), 05:40
I love the colours in this, but not so sure about the composition.

I guess I was trying to convey the quiet elegance of this building in the evening twighlight, and although it is peaceful I'm concerned about the 'balance' - What do you think?

http://www.pbase.com/pivison/image/34403713/large.jpg

Cheers,
Pete
Radtech1
10th of October 2004 (Sun), 06:30
I like it a lot. Well done. I can find only 2 things to critique and they are both minor. First, the sign in the lower right is very jarring, given the overall serenety of the rest of the shot - clone or crop, your choice. Same with the smokestacks (?) Second, I would selectivly rotate the horizon on the lower left just a weeeeeee bit clockwise.

Very nice, I would be proud.

Rad

PS - also, I am not sure about the point of the roof actually touching the edge. I did not mention it at first as it looked deliberate and a compositional focus. Then I got to thinking about the actual mechanics of framing this, and you would lose the point behind the mat anyways. Just something to think about.
JK
10th of October 2004 (Sun), 08:40
Daytripper,

You a West Aussie too ? 8)
Daytripper
10th of October 2004 (Sun), 08:58
Rad - Thanks for the pointers.

You're right about the sign - it has to go, and I'm going to try another crop that makes some space at the top.

JK - Guilty as charged :D

Cheers,
Pete
JK
10th of October 2004 (Sun), 09:00
JK - Guilty as charged :D

Cheers,
Pete

Any more Sandgropers on this board ? :D
PhotosGuy
10th of October 2004 (Sun), 18:41
All the above. I like the colors. I'd be easier to critique the comp if the pic was a bit smaller. It's taller than my 17" monitor.
kawter2
10th of October 2004 (Sun), 20:21
man that pic is peacefull!!
Daytripper
10th of October 2004 (Sun), 21:27
OK - Here's the second crop with sign and pipes removed....

http://www.pbase.com/pivison/image/34899255/original.jpg

Improvement?

Pete
manncer
10th of October 2004 (Sun), 22:20
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Very nice, just wish that awning wasn't on the building

manncer
JK
11th of October 2004 (Mon), 08:56
Nice, but I'd also crop the drainpipe running down the far right hand side...

Man, at this rate of cropping, all you'll have left is the windows! :D
BrandonSi
11th of October 2004 (Mon), 10:49
I like the drainpipe(s), they're symmetrical and reinforce the linear look of this shot.

Nice job getting rid of that sign too.
rick barclay
11th of October 2004 (Mon), 15:06
I like the cropped version just the way it is.