2nd try at OCF - desperately need your help

[white_aardvark]

OK, second try at taking a nice picture of my daughter, had about 5 minutes before she was uncomfortable...

homemade softbox with 430ex at 1/2 camera left
2nd flash bounced off ceiling
1/200 at f/4 and iso 100

I'm looking for your thoughts on the lighting, I will be using a smaller aperture on the next shots to get better DOF.

http://i613.photobucket.com/albums/tt220/white_aardvark/_MG_5002.jpg

[Marzunia]

I would prefer softer light , this one is too much. Some parts of white trousers look therefore overexposed i think.

[jenirose3]

your 430ex is too hot and you need more backlighting....keep trying your heading in the right direction