A practice shoot

[kona77]

Any and all opinions are welcome. I was hired to shoot a commercial for a large motorcycle dealership. My friend introduced me to a woman who is interested in getting into modeling. I told her to come along and I could pracitce taking pics while she practiced posing. These are just a couple of shots with some minor PP. I would be interested in an constructive critisim or editing. I just couldn't seem to set the camera to the magical setting that would grab all the detail and color.
Thanks

[goowa]

I'm no pro, but from a "common people" point of view, I think they are just a little busy. I don't know whether to look at the model, the 4 wheeler she's on, or the 500 vehicles in the background. Maybe isolate her on one machine and blur the background a bit. Again, I'm no expert, just a layman's opinion.

[kona77]

Thanks Goowa. The owner of the place wanted as much merchandise as possible in the commercial and in the shots. I can understand exactly where you are coming from.
Thanks
Tim

[Titus213]

Not bad but a bit busy, I agree. Perhaps a different angle? The ceiling does nothing for the shots.

I think your color issues may be white balance. There seems to be a mix of funky lights in the place mixing with your flash. Custom white balance may be the order of the day. I find these mixed light shoots nearly impossible to get the way I want them.

She is quite attractive and seems very relaxed in front of the camera.

[kona77]

Thanks Titus,
She is just beginning and I needed to coach her a bit. I shot those in raw and will work on adjustments. There was a mixture of lights as well as natural light coming and going.
I will post another pic in a bit when I download it to my other computer.
Thanks
Tim