Tear me apart please

ArjunaCapulong · 30th of May 2009 (Sat)

I'm new to this forum, but I heard I can find some of the nit-picky critique I need here.

I'll just post a few for the first one.

I was particularly concerned about the lighting on this one since there was so much space to expose...

I'm just a high school student but I'm pushing to get into fashion photography, so feel free to be as harsh as someone in that industry might be. If there's anything you need to know about the specifics of a photo, just let me know. Thanks!

aroundlsu · 30th of May 2009 (Sat)

You are on the right track. Others are not going to like that you cut her legs off at the knee in the bathtub shot but I don't mind that. I do it all the time.

The first picture is certainly creative, but a little confusing. Maybe if you cropped in a little tighter to lose some of the junk at the edge of the frame.

The wild hair/bedroom shot is very good. Somehow you nailed the exposure.

Stutterbug · 30th of May 2009 (Sat)

First one doesn't do much for me. I really like the other though. In number 2 I would have liked to see the entire bathtub forming the border to the picture but I still think it's really good. I like this set, color exposure look great.

semi-fly · 30th of May 2009 (Sat)

For some reason I really like the last shot it's playful like your bedroom shot but has a little more.

sanderd · 30th of May 2009 (Sat)

You know ... I really like number 4 the best. I think the lighting is good - even though you say you were worried about it - and the girls seem to jump out the scene. Nice.

tonydee · 30th of May 2009 (Sat)

Also a fan of the last two. The junk at left is just a little too much in #1. In #2 it's hard to know whether to call the coroner's office. #3 looks very forced and the necklace so retro it's hard to credit. #4 and #5 are both terrific. In #4, I like to see all of the hair exploding upwards, and a touch more shadow detail in the black garments, particularly the girl on our left. #5 works a treat as is: love the juxtaposition of more traditional asian hair style and colours with the hipness, colour and accessories.

Wow - and to be doing that in high school...! I think I'll have to toss all my old highschool photography slides if I ever find them again... ;-P.

Cheers, Tony

ArjunaCapulong · 30th of May 2009 (Sat)

Thank you for the feedback everyone, helpful!

30th of May 2009 (Sat)	#6
tonydee Goldmember Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Tokyo Posts: 2,009 IMAGE EDITING OK	Re: Tear me apart please Also a fan of the last two. The junk at left is just a little too much in #1. In #2 it's hard to know whether to call the coroner's office. #3 looks very forced and the necklace so retro it's hard to credit. #4 and #5 are both terrific. In #4, I like to see all of the hair exploding upwards, and a touch more shadow detail in the black garments, particularly the girl on our left. #5 works a treat as is: love the juxtaposition of more traditional asian hair style and colours with the hipness, colour and accessories. Wow - and to be doing that in high school...! I think I'll have to toss all my old highschool photography slides if I ever find them again... ;-P. Cheers, Tony __________________ 5D and too much glass. Mamiya 645E. http://www.picasaweb.com/anthonypon recent work

30th of May 2009 (Sat)	#7
ArjunaCapulong Junior Member Join Date: May 2009 Location: Indiana Posts: 15 IMAGE EDITING OK	Re: Tear me apart please Thank you for the feedback everyone, helpful! __________________ arjunacapulong.com Flickr

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30th of May 2009 (Sat)	#1
ArjunaCapulong Junior Member Join Date: May 2009 Location: Indiana Posts: 15 IMAGE EDITING OK	Tear me apart please I'm new to this forum, but I heard I can find some of the nit-picky critique I need here. I'll just post a few for the first one. I was particularly concerned about the lighting on this one since there was so much space to expose... I'm just a high school student but I'm pushing to get into fashion photography, so feel free to be as harsh as someone in that industry might be. If there's anything you need to know about the specifics of a photo, just let me know. Thanks! Last edited by ArjunaCapulong : 30th of May 2009 (Sat) at 12:02.

30th of May 2009 (Sat)	#2
aroundlsu Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 1,374	Re: Tear me apart please You are on the right track. Others are not going to like that you cut her legs off at the knee in the bathtub shot but I don't mind that. I do it all the time. The first picture is certainly creative, but a little confusing. Maybe if you cropped in a little tighter to lose some of the junk at the edge of the frame. The wild hair/bedroom shot is very good. Somehow you nailed the exposure.

30th of May 2009 (Sat)	#3
Stutterbug Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: San Diego Posts: 176 IMAGE EDITING OK	Re: Tear me apart please First one doesn't do much for me. I really like the other though. In number 2 I would have liked to see the entire bathtub forming the border to the picture but I still think it's really good. I like this set, color exposure look great. __________________ Canon 7D, EF 28-70L, EF 50, EF 28-90, EF 75-300, EF 35-70, EFS 28-135 and a desire to learn.

30th of May 2009 (Sat)	#4
semi-fly Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 132	Re: Tear me apart please For some reason I really like the last shot it's playful like your bedroom shot but has a little more. __________________ There are no rules for good photographs, there are only good photographs - Ansel Adams

30th of May 2009 (Sat)	#5
sanderd Member Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Nottingham, UK Posts: 116 IMAGE EDITING OK	Re: Tear me apart please You know ... I really like number 4 the best. I think the lighting is good - even though you say you were worried about it - and the girls seem to jump out the scene. Nice.