Critique needed ...

HazYleaF · 18th of January 2011 (Tue)

hoping you guys like it, but I'm sure there is room for improvement... let me have it... HeeHee..

haiko · 18th of January 2011 (Tue)

I am no expert in this but since you need critique ...

... I try to provide you some. I skip the positive things (it is meant to be a critique, no?):

1. You state in your sig "Man with a Camera and Lens", However, I have the impression that this picture has been taken with flash, right? I htink this is why the color renders a little blueish, it might as well come from the overcast sky (or my computer screen). Anyway, I would like it to be a tad warmer.

2. Pose of your subjects: without knowing what you aim to express this point is difficult to critique. What I see is a rather severe expression in the woman's (mother's) face holding back the boy, who eventually did not like posing for the picture. It captures a moment of discordance between the to, at least, this is how i see it.

Hope this is kinda what you expected. Just my 2 cents

HazYleaF · 18th of January 2011 (Tue)

No,no...you did great, it's exactly what I expected...Thank You...
I actually thought it was warm enough, and the reason the lil' boy is being held up is because my son is Autistic, and doesn't have great balance, especially in the sand.... But that was good, haiko, thanks.

haiko · 18th of January 2011 (Tue)

Quote:

Originally Posted by HazYleaF

and the reason the lil' boy is being held up is because my son is Autistic, and doesn't have great balance, especially in the sand....

sorry to hear about this.

Spike44 · 18th of January 2011 (Tue)

I would have liked to see more space (sand) on the bottom than the top (sky) Other than that - like it the way it is. The lighting is good but perhaps haiko is right - bit warmer.
I don't read a thing into the expressions.

HazYleaF · 18th of January 2011 (Tue)

Thanks, but no need to be sorry, I love my son, just the way he is...

HazYleaF · 18th of January 2011 (Tue)

Thanks spike..

heycow · 18th of January 2011 (Tue)

I think there's a hundred things you could have done differently to change the framing, look, position, etc and each would have had their own advantages and disadvantages. The shot you posted is really good. Your wife (I'm assuming) looks very strong (in a good way) and confident. The lighting and pose definitely accentuate her curves.

Your son doesn't actually look like he's being held up, just that your wife is trying to keep a typical boy from running around so you could take a photo.

The background is exposed perfectly, the subjects are exposed perfectly, and, amazingly enough for any kid but especially for an autistic one, he's looking at the camera.

If anything I'd crop a bit from the top, but that's not really important.

Corban227 · 19th of January 2011 (Wed)

maybe try to clone away the shadows from the flash. i love your signature in the pic btw. normally i hate them cause thats all my eye wants too look at but you placed yours very well.

HazYleaF · 19th of January 2011 (Wed)

Quote:

Originally Posted by heycow

amazingly enough for any kid but especially for an autistic one, he's looking at the camera.

You're quite right, but, there are certain sounds and songs he likes to hear with his name and that's how I get him to look my way, and I always make sure, I'm ready to take the shot... With time he's has come a long way working with his therapists and teachers, I can only hope one day to hear him call me "Daddy".... LOL...my daughter would have been in the picture but she found as any 10 year old would, that playing in the surf was more important at the moment...LOL....
Thanks for critique by the way....

HazYleaF · 19th of January 2011 (Wed)

Quote:

Originally Posted by Corban227

maybe try to clone away the shadows from the flash. i love your signature in the pic btw. normally i hate them cause thats all my eye wants too look at but you placed yours very well.

Yeah, placement of the flash was not that great, plus it was a bare flash at that, leaving the shadows...thanks for the critique...

sctbiggs · 19th of January 2011 (Wed)

Quote:

Originally Posted by HazYleaF

Thanks, but no need to be sorry, I love my son, just the way he is...

If there was a like button, I'd click this.

Maybe next time the two sitting down to avoid the posing issue.

HazYleaF · 19th of January 2011 (Wed)

Quote:

Originally Posted by sctbiggs

If there was a like button, I'd click this.

Maybe next time the two down to avoid the posing issue.

Hahahaaaa, Thanks....
Will try that next time....

GorgeShooter · 19th of January 2011 (Wed)

It's good that you used fill flash. It really balances out the dynamic range and emphasizes the subject. My only nit pick is the flash shadow on her right arm.

Flo · 19th of January 2011 (Wed)

Agree about the suggestion that they sit down, that way we could see interaction between the two, I bet your son loves the sand in his hand

18th of January 2011 (Tue)	#2
haiko Member Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Switzerland Posts: 256 IMAGE EDITING OK	Re: Critique needed ... I am no expert in this but since you need critique ... ... I try to provide you some. I skip the positive things (it is meant to be a critique, no?): 1. You state in your sig "Man with a Camera and Lens", However, I have the impression that this picture has been taken with flash, right? I htink this is why the color renders a little blueish, it might as well come from the overcast sky (or my computer screen). Anyway, I would like it to be a tad warmer. 2. Pose of your subjects: without knowing what you aim to express this point is difficult to critique. What I see is a rather severe expression in the woman's (mother's) face holding back the boy, who eventually did not like posing for the picture. It captures a moment of discordance between the to, at least, this is how i see it. Hope this is kinda what you expected. Just my 2 cents

18th of January 2011 (Tue)	#3
HazYleaF Member Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Connecticut Posts: 84	Re: Critique needed ... No,no...you did great, it's exactly what I expected...Thank You... I actually thought it was warm enough, and the reason the lil' boy is being held up is because my son is Autistic, and doesn't have great balance, especially in the sand.... But that was good, haiko, thanks. __________________ Man with a Camera and Lens And a Whole lot of Heart.. Hee Hee !!

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Spike44 Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Posts: 1,800 IMAGE EDITING OK	Re: Critique needed ... I would have liked to see more space (sand) on the bottom than the top (sky) Other than that - like it the way it is. The lighting is good but perhaps haiko is right - bit warmer. I don't read a thing into the expressions.

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HazYleaF Member Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Connecticut Posts: 84	Re: Critique needed ... Thanks, but no need to be sorry, I love my son, just the way he is... __________________ Man with a Camera and Lens And a Whole lot of Heart.. Hee Hee !!

18th of January 2011 (Tue)	#7
HazYleaF Member Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Connecticut Posts: 84	Re: Critique needed ... Thanks spike.. __________________ Man with a Camera and Lens And a Whole lot of Heart.. Hee Hee !!

18th of January 2011 (Tue)	#8
heycow Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Oakland, CA Posts: 771 IMAGE EDITING OK	Re: Critique needed ... I think there's a hundred things you could have done differently to change the framing, look, position, etc and each would have had their own advantages and disadvantages. The shot you posted is really good. Your wife (I'm assuming) looks very strong (in a good way) and confident. The lighting and pose definitely accentuate her curves. Your son doesn't actually look like he's being held up, just that your wife is trying to keep a typical boy from running around so you could take a photo. The background is exposed perfectly, the subjects are exposed perfectly, and, amazingly enough for any kid but especially for an autistic one, he's looking at the camera. If anything I'd crop a bit from the top, but that's not really important. __________________ Hello, my name is BEN Family Photos :: My Maya-A-Day :: One Owen-A-Day Canon 40D :: Canon 24-105f/4L IS :: Canon 50f/1.4 :: Sigma 30f/1.4 :: Canon 580EXII w/Big FlipIt! :: Like a dozen different bags...Go Crumpler!

19th of January 2011 (Wed)	#9
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