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May 20, 2010 12:40 |  #1

I took this and several pics for a friend and need open honesty.


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May 20, 2010 12:59 |  #2

The little strand of hair on her right side of her face swooping by her eye is a little distracting to me. It also looks a little under exposed and lacking contrast but that could just be my monitor.


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May 20, 2010 13:00 |  #3

skintones are a little gray. dress really pops.


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May 20, 2010 13:02 |  #4

I'd be a little more concerned about the legs akimbo, and where's that hand going? hehe!

I'd like to see the other pics, as there's nothing wrong with the focussing or anything, just an unfortunate crop. ;)


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May 20, 2010 13:04 |  #5

Your location was great and your model just amazing. Unfortunately, your photo is a bit dark to my eyes and looks a bit underexposed. I would like to add some light by PP but only on your models face and body. It could be a bit sharper too.




  
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May 20, 2010 13:06 |  #6

get some light on her




  
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May 20, 2010 13:23 |  #7

could of also through the backround out of focus a little more nice model also.


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May 20, 2010 13:49 as a reply to  @ urfastimfaster's post |  #8

Here is another right of the camera, converted from raw to jpeg and imagesized down. There has been no post processing. She was great to work with.


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May 20, 2010 14:00 |  #9

beautiful model, but the first pic I guess the leg would be alot better if it wasn't cut out, and might a li'l bit lighting on her face would be nice


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May 20, 2010 14:15 |  #10

first image - add some light to her face in PP, increase contrast, do something about the really light spot in the BG - crop this so that the leg is not apparent and the severed hand is also not apparent. Think headshot.... Fix the stray hair on her face... I cant tell in this image, but check for catch lights in her eyes.

I would love to have a go at this one, if you want. Just turn your "okay to edit my images" on.

Image 2 - the leg pose is a little odd for me. Her elbows locked don't add much to the shot.

Suggestions to help get it more right in camera - bring a reflector and someone to hold it. Study posing. Keep shooting and submitting for CC and use the suggestions to your benefit. If you can get this model back in front of your lens, please do.


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May 20, 2010 14:20 as a reply to  @ apixelintime's post |  #11

This was our first.. Both of us. We have already talked about another session. This was shot on Tuesday at 7pm. I will submit more.


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May 20, 2010 14:29 |  #12

great model, 1st pic needed a better crop.
2nd picture is a lot better.




  
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May 20, 2010 15:01 |  #13

In my opinion, the magnolia (or whatever tree it is) ruins it. It just subtracts from the photo. Makes it feel cramped when actually out in a wide open space. In the same spot minus the tree, I would have loved the location.


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May 20, 2010 15:34 |  #14

MaGeKo wrote in post #10216463 (external link)
Your location was great and your model just amazing. Unfortunately, your photo is a bit dark to my eyes and looks a bit underexposed. I would like to add some light by PP but only on your models face and body. It could be a bit sharper too.

+1 - Model is gorgeous but the image is underexposed.


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May 20, 2010 17:44 |  #15

brywill32669 wrote in post #10216347 (external link)
I took this and several pics for a friend and need open honesty.

I took a quick 5-minutes on this so you could see another view of your first shot.

Your model is very lovely and I think the overall composition is very alluring. I don't always subscribe to all the rules that are often called out.

Working the original would produce a much cleaner result but I defocused and darkened the background while lighting up your model and sharpening her just a very little bit (could do more with the original). Also, added just a touch of saturation and vibrance to her lips. Also, tried to remove that hair strand (again would be easier on the original).

Best though, is to reshoot her and get some light on her. The more I look at this, the more I like the allure of the crop.


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