Over-all I think I like it...particularly the pp. A couple of little nitpics though...
First I don't think the DOF was actually too shallow as much as misplaced. As is, it comes up just a bit short of the center of the flower. I think if the center of the flower had of been in focus, even if the pedals in the extreme foreground were slightly blurred, I think it would have worked.
Also, I would most definitely have cloned out those two little brown spots on the white pedal...very distracting. I also would have either moved the green leaf from in front of the white pedal or simply cloned that out as well.
Last but not least, I would have tried to do something with that one pedal that's "sticking up"...personally I would have tried to finesse it in to a better position or, considering the brown spot on the pedals, maybe used a different flower instead.
Over all I like the concept but I think these little details take away from the image as a whole.
Just my opinion,
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