I only watched about 3 minutes of it.
2 minutes of the lady opening the door and entering the house and taking off her shoes is wayyyyyyyy too much time. You will not engage your audience this way. You need to make your segments quicker. The opening and unlocking door shot was from 0.28 to 0.52 seconds! Way too long for a static shot of door handles.. Also all of your shots seem to be static, in different positions sitting on a tripod. No real movement or excitement. Needs more glidecam/steadycam!
Then for the shower scene, for some reason you abandoned the tripod (maybe you had limited space) and you shot handheld which is worse.
But it's not too bad since you have a much steadier hand than I do.
You need to engage your audience quicker..
This might work for some audience, but not for the average 18-28 males.
In the first 3 seconds there was nothing to keep my eyes glued, so the video lost my interest.
I have a degree and tons of experience in advertising and marketing.
Other than that I don't know.. I'm not a "know it all", and I'm no videographer, I only do stills.
These are just my opinions