2nd try portrait

Well after some critique I received ofc positive I had time today to do some portrait pictures. I always underexpose my pictures so here goes my 2nd try

I used my 55-250mm Canon lens I own 60D

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First looks like a candid grab, the verticals are off, and the second, ach! What's with that crop/framing??

Flo wrote in post #15130335
First looks like a candid grab, the verticals are off, and the second, ach! What's with that crop/framing??

I used my 55-250mm it wasn't cropped it was simply to close.

Can you explain me how to improve the first one pls

sorry its looks like 2 snapshots from a P& Shot

deviangel wrote in post #15130347
I used my 55-250mm it wasn't cropped it was simply to close.

Can you explain me how to improve the first one pls

Okm, it was way too close for the second, CLipping his chin out not a great idea.

First, see the wall behind her?Get those lines straight, or it tends to look like everything is tilted.

Flo wrote in post #15130368
Okm, it was way too close for the second, CLipping his chin out not a great idea.

First, see the wall behind her?Get those lines straight, or it tends to look like everything is tilted.

Ok ty. What about the ideas and the colors?

The previous I had them underexposed. Are those things ok here ?

Ideas? As in posing? Not seeing a concept in these.The tones in the first feel good to me.

The second would have been more interesting had you included all of his face.Feels a little yellow, but that could be the indoor lights.

Flo wrote in post #15130392
Ideas? As in posing? Not seeing a concept in these.The tones in the first feel good to me.

The second would have been more interesting had you included all of his face.Feels a little yellow, but that could be the indoor lights.

I meant like the idea of the black and white.

Yup its indoor lighthing.

The thing is that I was cleaning my sensor with the pump and it had dust ..the bad thing I had to use q-tip for part of the dust it wouldn't come off so I said lets test now I had like small dust and liek hair inside now its ok
so I tried that lighting

Also, for the first image (and all images from here to the end of eternity) - don't use your on-camera flash.

Ever...

The first image you might be able to position her better, someplace without distractions in the background. If you have to place her there then try to move her away from the wall and get some separation so that you can get a better DOF. There is also something going on with the the alignment of items, is she leaning back or something?

The second image is better but you could also improve by cropping out the red pillow on the couch in the background for example, this is something that you can do when you frame the shot.

I like the 1st photo. The pose, lighting and not being horizontal give it a certain film noir
expressionist feeling to it. Hopefully you were going for that look. If not, then what they said... -rick