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Dec 05, 2013 20:55 |  #1

I took my son out on Saturday for a shoot. This was my second shoot ever. I was going for the street / urban look. I kinda got it. I have two questions. 1 is this a quality photo? And 2 how could it be better.


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Dec 05, 2013 21:02 |  #2

I'm not the best to critique portraits, but would like to see more space in front of him (less behind him) and would prefer his legs and feet were fully in the image. Also, the brighter background tends to draw the viewer away from the subject.


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Dec 05, 2013 21:05 |  #3

I'm not a fan of the pose. The background is very distracting and does not serve to help isolate your subject. The focus looks off on his face. There is some odd backlighting on the pole which is very distracting.




  
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Dec 05, 2013 23:46 |  #4

I agree with all the points listed. Also, the subject is underexposed and expressionless.




  
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Dec 06, 2013 15:42 |  #5

the answer to your question is practice, study, practice, study, practice. go to the library and spend a bunch of time viewing portraiture.




  
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Dec 06, 2013 16:10 |  #6

jetcode wrote in post #16507054 (external link)
the answer to your question is practice, study, practice, study, practice. go to the library and spend a bunch of time viewing portraiture.

Im a step ahead. I have been dong this for week. I have only been shooting people for a week. I shot birds in the past.




  
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Dec 06, 2013 16:58 |  #7

amrmatt wrote in post #16507111 (external link)
Im a step ahead. I have been dong this for week. I have only been shooting people for a week. I shot birds in the past.

Keep up the good work. One thing that may help is to find a particular portrait that appeals to you and try to recreate it.




  
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Dec 06, 2013 19:32 |  #8

I like the idea of it, but it would be more pleasing to the eye if his feet were not cut off and he were more centered in the photo. I actually like the setting. Try using a wider aperture (like 2.2?) to really separate him from it. Also, google "male poses" or "male high school senior poses" or something like that for posing ideas. Good start! I hope he continues to enjoy working with you.:)


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Dec 06, 2013 22:18 |  #9

My eye immediately noticed his missing hands and feet. And the show was pretty much over at that point.

Try this area again if you can. The red lamps are kind of interesting. The tone is cool overall, blues in his clothes and grays of the street. But then we have the red lamp posts. There are probably some cool compositions to be had here.




  
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Dec 06, 2013 22:29 |  #10

I am going back here for sure. I have 2 flashes now for off camera work. Can't wait to try them here. It took some time to get this one shot. Its in the middle of a tourist destination and I had to wait several times for folks to move through my shot




  
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Dec 06, 2013 22:51 |  #11
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There's too much clutter on the frame and the background is uninteresting and distracting. Were it not for the innate tendency of the eye to zone in on a human figure, the eye would wander aimlessly throughout the frame. When the background is bad, one thing you can do is crop tight: go for a full face or a head-n-shoulders photo. This will also make it easier on your shooting, as you won't have to wait for passers-by to move out of the frame.

I'd start this portraiture journey using only one flash. Once you've mastered one light, then you can move on to two and more. Trying to juggle two right at the beginning is gonna lead to frustration. In the meanwhile, you can order a Rogue Grid Set for your second flash: it's amazing how necessary grids are in portraiture.


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