1 - apparently my hair light didn't fire... near shoulder is pushed forward; this is because I heavily cropped the image, her hand would have shown why this was needed. Lighting kind of flat, but not as bad as #2.
2 - too flat. legs too dark (can't fix legs; room too small.)
4 - eyes a little big, framed too tight.
5 - hand/arm placement doesn't make sense.
7 - (this one especially) fingers seem tightened and too close together.
8 - arm placement with facial expression / head direction is incongruent.
And the dress isn't great.