A date at the beach - C&C please

Hmm, does this work? Trying to get into portraiture. Go crazy with your c&c, don't be to comment if you do not like something.

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Or perhaps this one is better?

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No it doesnt work. I can give you one word....Faces

take the picture from the top view. the bottom picture is better from those 2 but still isn't that great.

Doesn't work at all, sorry.

Ah well, this picture is actually a picture I found from one of my old albums. Thought I'd edit it to make it look well but looks like the composition doesn't work.

Thanks for the help guys.

It's interesting. I think it was a great moment, but you could've captured it in a different perspective. May be a ground level shot, as a previous poster stated 'faces', or an above shot might've been better. The photo doesn't really provide any aesthetic value. Keep working hard.