I made a short comedy video

hey guys hows it going? I started to make some videos once again. (haven't made anything in awhile). Well i recently just made a short comedy. I wrote a quick script and shot with my friend. I hope its funny. Let me know what you guys think

http://www.youtube.com​/watch?v=6yu34pDayDA

didn't do it for me.. the sound was all over the place.. needs compression... Alot of soft shots and unsteady camerawork..

i also didn't really find it funny...

sorry dude...

This one didn't work for me either. I'm not worried about the technical side, just the story wasn't that great.
Keep making movies and sharing them.
Cheers

Keep working on your script, seems like you just cut it short.(even though, i get you want it to be a comedy short).

Any input is good. even someone saying they didnt like it is good input. Its all about adding and removing, changing and changing, onward, ever forward. but that is for brainstorming.
writing anything that could be performed is just like an English essay in school, it doesnt have to be, but its always appealing to understand what is happening and to wonder what is next, A beginning a middle and end is always nice.

Just remember that when your writing, its always okay to kill your baby.
We used to say this in an old theater troupe i was in.

everyone can will and have creative ideas, so as great as you think yours may be, its okay to kill it off and change it up. its usually for the best.