70-200 is the predominate focal length for basketball for all levels of play, so yes, 85mm is fine. Your original shots are too loose. Including unnecessary defenders/refs/background distracts from the subject(s). Search the forums and news sites for examples of basketball photos. Some perspective is nice, but including the basket or floor isn't a requirement. The game is fairly straightforward, so not much is needed in terms of perspective, that is, as long as you show action that needs no explanation. Take your 2nd shot for example... you could crop that several different ways, and in the end, the viewer would still know what was going on. The same can't be said for the 1st one. Just keep at it, and you will get better at tracking with the focus point.