+1 -- Much better. The background in the OP's post is just too distracting. Funny, looking at some of his other work on his flickr page, in my opinion, this is far far from his best work. (I'm guessing this model is someone special )
BTW, he was using a 35mm and 50 f/4.0 prime (I forget which was which). One was wide open, the other was not (but sill open more than f/2.8).
Even wide open, the 35 is not going to provide a lot of separation with distances that he is shooting (i.e., focus distance and subject to background distance) but you can see that some of the brush, further in the background, is nicely blurred. If he had just had her step forward about 4 or 5 feet, the shot would have been much better right off the bat.
I was thinking the same thing. Even with this girl there are better images, IMO.