Interested in critique

And I meant Critique

Hi there,

The first thing I noticed as critique on this image is angle of the photo. I'm not a fan of horizons that aren't straight.. But it almost kinda works thanks to the train tracks... almost
Also, it's a bit dull/flat, but it does look quite overcast. I'd also crop out the bottom a bit. There's a lot of rocks going on at the bottom of the frame which aren't adding anything to the pic IMO

In saying that, it's nice a clear, and you have plenty of light on the subjects face. Well exposed and in focus

cheers

The pose just doesnt work. Because the pose isnt natural, you are left to wonder why she is on her knees with her hand on the track. Not all poses have to be natural, but when they arent then there should be something alluring or intrigueing happening and I dont get that here. Generally you dont want to shoot upward at someone with a rounded face. On a positive note youve done well with the exposure and mood.

I agree with gonzogolf....the setting/outfit just does not fit. It almost looks like she fell on the track.
Yes, given the light background, very nice exposure, focus, lighting.

Oh, I so wish people would stay away from train tracks - a teacher was killed here taking photos on train tracks - that being said - even if the tracks are no longer used - it is getting old...
The light is great - don't understand the pose - do you have any others of her?...she has a beautiful outfit on, she is a beautiful girl, the lighting is right - the pose and location just do not work at all.
Sorry Sorry Sorry I feel mean.

Diane

Let's start by getting her off the tracks. It's illegal and it's cliche. The dutch tilt is also cliche. The pose is uncomfortable to look at. I can only imagine how uncomfortable it is for her. She looks so uncomfomfortable having to awkwardly lean on the rail and protrude her neck up like that. Looking at how her hair is laying against her head and the shine on her face, she appears uncomfortably warm too. Let's end this disaster with a bad pun, the crop choice is a trainwreck.

With better direction, this young lady is capable of pulling off a better portrait. She deserves better than what she got from the photographer this time. I hope that you are able to learn and improve, and can give her a nicer keepsake in the future. Thank her for her patience and keep practicing.

Train tracks = selective color.

Thanks all - this actually turned out to be one of her favorite ones, I didn't put her in this pose, she chose to do it.

Here is a more normal picture of her:

IMAGE LINK: https://flic.kr/p/oMzN​Nq

texkam wrote in post #17145400
Let's start by getting her off the tracks. It's illegal and it's cliche. The dutch tilt is also cliche. The pose is uncomfortable to look at. I can only imagine how uncomfortable it is for her. She looks so uncomfomfortable having to awkwardly lean on the rail and protrude her neck up like that. Looking at how her hair is laying against her head and the shine on her face, she appears uncomfortably warm too. Let's end this disaster with a bad pun, the crop choice is a trainwreck.

With better direction, this young lady is capable of pulling off a better portrait. She deserves better than what she got from the photographer this time. I hope that you are able to learn and improve, and can give her a nicer keepsake in the future. Thank her for her patience and keep practicing.

It's my niece so she got it for free

saea501 wrote in post #17145720
Train tracks = selective color.

Normally I don't use selective color, but I'm interested in seeing what you would do with it...

tmoore323 wrote in post #17145999
Normally I don't use selective color, but I'm interested in seeing what you would do with it...

I think you miss the point. Train tracks are as cliche as selective color, and friends dont ket friends use selective color. On another note. She really needs to stop doing the selfie pose. Turning her face away and then raising her chin makes her look larger. If possible take a shor of her from slightly above it will give her a stronger chin, and you can show off her assests in a more flattering way.

I disagree with the others critiquing the pose. I think she looks self-confident - not uncomfortable at all. I also disagree with the RR-track complaint as cliche. Sunsets are certainly cliche by the same reasoning; but I imagine we'll continue to see them well into the future.

Nice light, focus, & exposure.

My only suggestion is to crop it square just below her knees.

cameragal1 wrote in post #17145357
Oh, I so wish people would stay away from train tracks - a teacher was killed here taking photos on train tracks
Diane

Thank you for saying that, I see these shots with people using active rail lines (you can tell because the rail head is clean and shiny) way too often.

This is a great way to get you and your model killed, folks ! Even experienced, safety-trained rail workers die every year on the rails. A train can literally be on top of you before you know it, the speeds are very difficult to judge because they're so large. It happens and it's totally avoidable. Stay off the rails out of the right-of-way, please.

gonzogolf wrote in post #17146082
I think you miss the point. Train tracks are as cliche as selective color, and friends dont ket friends use selective color. On another note. She really needs to stop doing the selfie pose. Turning her face away and then raising her chin makes her look larger. If possible take a shor of her from slightly above it will give her a stronger chin, and you can show off her assests in a more flattering way.

You seem to be active here, and I checked out some of your work, which from what I seen I liked - how about some links to pictures that you have done that would help me a lot more then short responses?