Critique my first ever "Graphic Design"

Critique my first ever "Graphic Design" that I made for my sister's hair salon,

We spent 2 hours and $0.00, with her providing the details and myself the layout. This is for a small B+W advertising run in a local paper, 6" X 4.75". I'm pretty happy with the design.

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i would have the "l" and the "d" not connected, but that's just me

change the color of the fonts a little, but keep it gray scale.

Also I am not feeling the font on the top, it a display font, just doesn't fit.

Other than that it looks good. Also rule of thumb no more than 3 different fonts on one piece.

Hope this helps

Rich

Percen wrote in post #3059607
=Percen%;3059607]i would have the "l" and the "d" not connected, but that's just me

I thought the same way, but she wanted them connected

RysioK wrote in post #3059765
change the color of the fonts a little, but keep it gray scale.

Also I am not feeling the font on the top, it a display font, just doesn't fit.

Other than that it looks good. Also rule of thumb no more than 3 different fonts on one piece.

Hope this helps

Rich

I'm not too hot over the Papyrus font, because it's on every computer and EVERYONE uses it. But I knew better then to use a lot of different fronts, there are only 2... the "Full service hair salon" is just bold+italic version of the same font used in the rest of the design.

Thanks for the feedback guys!