New model - what's wrong?

I love this one, but something is missing.

I am shooting this again. Any suggestions?

I'm all ears.

-Clos

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I would've scooted her but to the right and had her arch more. This will give more curves to the shot.

Were you using any filters or did you apply vaseline? it looks to have a bit of a glow to it. The colors look great.

Ditch the bikini.

No vaseline, filter.

I really need your help guys I shoot again next week both with a diferent model and the same one.

Other comments welcome as well.

-Clos

Hello Clos,

For me, I think the composition is the problem. I would try adding more of the table into the shot. As it is now, it's not enough to add anything to the shot, but enough to be distracting. (You could alternatively show less of the table.) Also, the model's face and head look disproportionately small to the rest of her body to me. Maybe that's because the way her shoulders are shrugged blocks the side of her neck, or maybe it's the pose itself only showing half of her face. I would try to shoot more of her face if possible. On the plus side, you have a beautiful model and a beautiful exposure in terms of color and sharpness. You did a great job of keeping a proper exposure, i.e. sky not overexposed and model not underexposed.

Good luck on your next shoot!
-Deva

This is a good observation. The low shooting angle seems to accentuate the size of her legs while minimizing her shoulders and head. Similar to the "converging parallels" effect one gets when shooting a building with the camera angled up.

Agreed. She doesn't look gracefully slim this way...

What if you'd make her put her right leg a little lower and her left a little higher, so there would be a window made between knees.

And, yeah, ditch the bikini!! Or make her wear a single colored one, perhaps white would be best.

I am not great at this but I keep seeing all that blue sky. It draws me away from the subject

JZ

I see by your EXIF data that your Focal Length was at 42.0mm (35mm equiv on 10D = 67mm), that is part of the problem. For best results when shooting women use nothing less then 50mm on a 10D (35mm equivalent = 80mm). This will keep your proportions more natural. The low angle really doesn't help you out here either as it compounds your proportional issues. Try to shoot at eye level. IMHO I think a different angle altogether would be better with this model ( hard to tell what her figure is really like by this image). You need a pose that is flattering, profiles seldom are, so on your next shoot look carefully through the view finder and move around the model to find her special angle...

I"d say she needs to be on the right side of the table facing left.

Good advice, Jeff.