New flash pics, please provide feedback

Hi peoples,

The other day i posted for the first time about purchasing new twin canon 580exII flashes and wireless transmittor. At that time i ran home and snapped a couple of pics of the wife.

Today however, i planned ahead and took some photos of the wife again and seeking cronstructive advise how how to improve further.

FYI. i shot using ISO800 Two flashes of camera canon 24-105 L series f4. Manual shutter and app 1/125 @ F4. Custom white balance

For one of the flashes i built a beauty dish and mounted it to my flash, for the other i bounced of a wall. ( the beauty dish, if your interested. got the specs from the strobist sight)

here are some pics, please comment and give me tips, if i can id like to getter more defined shadows on one side of her face. again please advise and thanks.

NicholasBB

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Are you wanting help with posing or lighting? The critique section might help you more. The lighting seems a little bit flat, I don't like that her forehead is dark in the right hand one, I think the light's coming from the wrong direction. From the side's best. In the first the background's busy and dark.

Thanks Tim,

Yes i should have been more specific, help with lighting technuiqes is what i am after. but having said that. any advice is much appreciated.

NicholasBB

#1: With that pose (her face is pointing slightly camera right) and the way her hair is, I would rather see the main light on camera right. Also try a little more main light and a little less fill. This is just my opinion from looking at the shadow patterns, not a matter of right or wrong.

#2: I don't know how to photograph upside-down people. I never tried it.