Red Shirt and Straw Hat

i agree, its good enfough for any major magazine, maybe even the cover
the background and the eyes are fine i think
they both make you look at her
the picture of the girl is quite good too

The little girl is a better picture in the sense of being ready for press, in my opinion.

As good as the image of the woman with the penetrating stare is, I think one would have to do something about the background in order to market it.