First Model Shoot - C&C welcome

Been reading a lot on the strobist blog and planetneil, learning everything that I can about lighting and such. This past Sunday night I had my first chance to test everything out. Found a model that was looking to try modeling and asked her if she wanted to give it a go. Explained to her that I was new at this as well so I think that eased the expectations a bit. It was easy to see that she was really nervous and a little self conscience but I think she did really well. There were some rookie mistakes that I made like forgetting I could adjust the ISO...(I was nervous too). Definitely need help with posing as that was really strange to me. All in all I think I got some good workable results. I did a quick PP to these but before I dig into the more extension processing, I wanted to get some feedback from everyone here. Using my 30D, 430EX on bracket with homemade stofen type diffuser, 45" white umbrella with old Vivitar 2800-D flash wireless triggered. EXIF data for all images should be intact.

EDIT: Forgot to add...Full gallery can be viewed here: http://www.fixedfocus.​us/images/kaela/

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She's cute, and it looks like you did pretty well for your first time (I haven't gotten to play with off camera lighting yet, so I'm just going by what I've seen)....

The only thing that I see is in number 4, her head looks a little bit bigger and out of proportion with her body.

I think the 2nd one is my favorite though.

Did you do any pp on them? Just curious.

the second set looks better to me; the first set appears a bit flat.

Awesome job - for your first time you did great! Most of these just need a little skin touch-up.

2, 3, 5, 6, and 8 are better shots to me.

lulugus wrote in post #6049796
Awesome job - for your first time you did great! Most of these just need a little skin touch-up.

2, 3, 5, 6, and 8 are better shots to me.

Thanks, The skin touch up is where I am diving into new territory, I am trying to keep everything in lightroom2 so still learning all the tools. I am native to photoshop but resisting that part at the moment.

Looking back I wish I had my 430EX off camera with an umbrella/softbox as well. I think the lighting would have been better and not so flat in some of the shots. Any way to fudge that in PP?

DoodleBunz wrote in post #6049763
She's cute, and it looks like you did pretty well for your first time (I haven't gotten to play with off camera lighting yet, so I'm just going by what I've seen)....

The only thing that I see is in number 4, her head looks a little bit bigger and out of proportion with her body.

I think the 2nd one is my favorite though.

Did you do any pp on them? Just curious.

#4 - Thats what 17mm gives you... I thought the same thing but something about the shot makes me like it. I love this lens though...

The PP I have done so far is minor exposure adjustments, cropping, some saturation and a little noise reduction.

Hey!! Your pictures are great!! I really liked the 6th one. It doesnt look like you did any editing so i tried editing it in photoshop.. tell me if you like it

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# 3, 5, and 8 are my favorites.

i like her outfit in 3 and 4 and also her shirt in the last one...but those shorts don't really fit with the outfit. overall, looks like you had fun with her and got some nice pictures. a little skin touch-up is necessary though, as mentioned...especially because she looks sweaty and so her skin is shiny in some. i think you should also think about dialing your flash down a little bit because sometimes it is harsh.

I can't C&C technique, because I am learning and don't know...but as a viewer...the hanger straps sticking out of the shirt on a couple of the pics distracted me...

nice. love orlando for the scenery. noticed from the fountain in the first couple photos. bocaj used that other fountain in the 3rd and 4th shots, for some shots he's shown on here.

awesome lighting!

Good start!
The only major thing I see is her front leg looks like it was amputated at the knee in #2.

Attractive and stunning shots

Other than the folded leg in #2, I think you did an excellent job.