Hi Matthew,
You've removed EXIF data so we can't see what camera settings you used, making it harder to suggest alternatives.
Both have a very severe colour cast... dominates everything. Compositionally, #1 has the subject centred, which doesn't tend to work too well, and there's a lot of dead space above and below. A 60 second edit:
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Simply cropped and adjusted colour balance. Doesn't make for a particularly good picture, but I think it's an improvement. Do shoot RAW as it makes it easier to adjust colour cast problems, and handle mild over-exposure, without seriously degrading image quality.
#2 has somewhat better composition, but it's still a bit awkward and "heavy".
To get on top of night-time exposure issues, the easiest way is to learn the techniques of High Dynamic Range photography. Your camera has a menu option to enable "Exposure Bracketing", which will automatically take a series of shots with different exposure levels, then many popular software packages (e.g. GIMP
http://gimp.org
, Adobe Photoshop) let you combine the properly exposed areas each picture.
Cheers, Tony