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Long Exposure - Critic Please

 
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Jun 05, 2009 20:21 |  #1

shot this the other night and would love some critic, i will probly be heading back there soon so if you guys have any ideas on how to improve this shot i would love to hear them, fire away.

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does it work?

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Jun 05, 2009 20:25 |  #2
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I like the concept, although I'm not a fan of the debris on the ground. I would clone out the tiny bits of light in the top left to make it all dark. That's my opinion.


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Jun 06, 2009 01:20 |  #3

Very cool how the door frame is illuminated and seems to almost frame the subject. I would if I were you eliminate the lighted part behind the subject it is somewhat distracting. Maybe you can use a snoot at direct some light into the subjects facial area or just make it so she is completely silhouetted. I think the debris adds to the aesthetic of the location so definitely keep that in there.




  
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Jun 06, 2009 02:04 |  #4
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How you got the person to stand absolutely still for 30secs, wow, I can only imagine how it was done




  
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Jun 06, 2009 02:08 as a reply to  @ photagraph's post |  #5

Out of curiosity, why the long exposure if you are using flash to light the shoot? Was it to capture some ambient as well as flash behind the person?

I too like the rubble but feel that a tighter crop to remove some of the dead space to the left. If you are going to re-shoot as you have suggested, then perhaps you could play around with a few variations with an aerosol in the hand or sitting on a BMX bike or something.

One last point, I think the lighting on the graffiti (camera right) is looking too bright and unnatural. Is there any way that you could position/gobo/modify the light to make it look like it's coming through a roof light or a window, perhaps kicking up a bit of dust to add to the atmosphere.

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Jun 06, 2009 22:56 as a reply to  @ SAB_Click's post |  #6

thanks so much for the feedback everybody. very, very much appreciated.

goldboughtrue, i will definitly be messing around with some cloning and i will keep your thoughts in mind.

i was using 30 seconds because i had been walking around and doing some light painting with LEDs and torches in the frame, the graffitii is lit with a LED torch pointed at the wall. i used 30 seconds so i have time to walk around in the frame and try out some different light painting.

thanks again, these ideas and suggesting are exactly the type of feedback i was hoping to get. would still love to hear from anyone else.




  
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Jun 07, 2009 00:36 |  #7

I like this picture a lot. only point I would agree with is the lit area behind the person.


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Jun 07, 2009 09:47 |  #8

Quite dramatic. It does work, though leaves me wondering about the context. Nothing wrong with a bit of mystery, though.


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Jun 09, 2009 07:32 as a reply to  @ Sisyphus's post |  #9

thanks for that stutterbug and sisyphus.
i will definitly see if anything can be done about the lit area behind the person during the reshoot.




  
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