Second shoot

After I learned a whole lot from my first shoot with my girlfriend, I took her out for another session. I have more to process, but I'll post them later. C&C please

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I can only see number 1 at the moment and it is a nice shot with great eye contact, on the down side I find the background very distracting.

Dave.

I dont know if it is her skin or her hair but the lines on the neck bug me a little bit. Other than that great shot.

Davy OBrien wrote in post #10452522
=Davy O'Brien;10452522]I can only see number 1 at the moment and it is a nice shot with great eye contact, on the down side I find the background very distracting.

Dave.

Thanks Dave. I found the background distracting too, thats why I tried to blow it out at f/2.2. Is the second one working now?

Mgw189 wrote in post #10453029
I dont know if it is her skin or her hair but the lines on the neck bug me a little bit. Other than that great shot.

Its skin. They bugged me too. How could you get rid of that with posing? She really wanted to pose looking back at the camera.

For me its too much negative space behind her head. I get what you were trying to do but I think more space in front of her rather than so much behind.

I'm having a hard time getting the second image to post for some reason. Its showing up on my computer, but not on my mobile. I tried it again and it should be showing now.

gonzogolf wrote in post #10455068
For me its too much negative space behind her head. I get what you were trying to do but I think more space in front of her rather than so much behind.

I see what you're saying. Getting rid of the negative space behind her would also eliminate most of the busy background. I'll see what I can do with it.

careful with that rim light and hairy arms

gonzogolf wrote in post #10455068
For me its too much negative space behind her head. I get what you were trying to do but I think more space in front of her rather than so much behind.

I cropped the negative space and posted the new version in my OP. Is it better or too tight now?

korrektor wrote in post #10455403
careful with that rim light and hairy arms

Not hairy, just a little fuzz

One more for now:

Staszek wrote in post #10456852
I cropped the negative space and posted the new version in my OP. Is it better or too tight now?

Not hairy, just a little fuzz

I like it better. She is looking back into the image. In the original she was looking out of the image. If used properly you can create tension with framing like your original, but it helps to have a less intrusive background.

A very nice candid smile on your last photo.

She is quite attractive with beautiful eyes.

If she didnt look back quite so far it would probably help with the issue with her neck.

Mgw189 wrote in post #10457157
If she didnt look back quite so far it would probably help with the issue with her neck.

I'll give that a try next time. Thanks.

Yaamon wrote in post #10456979
A very nice candid smile on your last photo.

She is quite attractive with beautiful eyes.

Thanks.

gonzogolf wrote in post #10456887
I like it better. She is looking back into the image. In the original she was looking out of the image. If used properly you can create tension with framing like your original, but it helps to have a less intrusive background.

Gotcha. Thanks for the input, I'll keep that in mind.