I'm going to give you some constructive critique, which you really, really need. Please take it as helpful and friendly advice from someone who's made the same mistakes, and learned from them.
Overall, it's really, really bad, very amateurish, probably on the same sort of level as my first album was 6-7 years ago. The processing isn't good, there's no flow, there's no symmetry, it's very dark rather than light and airy, and it uses overlays which are one of my most disliked album styles. It doesn't tell a story. Album design is hard, to start with. I wouldn't let this near the B&G at all, ever.
Here's some page by page critique:
1) The album starts with an image from the end of the night, which feels backward. I often use a nice portrait from the middle of the day, but this one feels too late. Also the mixed color temperatures and the underexposure in the image doesn't help it. My suggestion: use a different image, even a detail show.
2) There's no symmetry or flow, at all, plus that tilted image just looks wrong. The silhouette shot doesn't mix well with the others. It really tells me nothing about the people or the day. I suggest choosing different images, four on the left and one on the right, and to help the flow have the image on the right align with the top and bottom of the images on the left.
3) Mixed B&W and color rarely works. Images are underexposed. The triangle shape bothers me. See page 2 recommendations.
4) OMG. Why would you arrange images like that? Sometimes it can be done to make a page visually interesting, but there has to be some pattern or rhythm to it to achieve that. Start this page again.
6) The huge faded image shows NOTHING. Nothing interesting. The back of some dude's head, and a video camera. Mix of color & B&W. A dark, depressing page.
7) Why the poor alignment? Full page, full bleed, if you lose the minister that's tough.
8) Poor balance.
9) Make LHS image bigger so top and bottom align with RHS page.
10) You faded out the nice moment.
11) Lots of nothing photos, that mix dark and light together to form a visual jumble. Zoom the LHS image to avoid the wasted empty space.
12) The big cake image and small cake image together feels wrong to me, plus they run together in a confusing way.
14) Colors, alignment.
15) LHS image too cool. RHS image is a nothing image.
17) Nice image. Full page, full bleed.
18) Same image as page 1? Align it properly, process it properly.
Overall recommendations:
- Use white backgrounds.
- Use a thin keyline around the images (optional, personal taste).
- Aim for alignment, flow, symmetry.
- KISS (keep it simple, stupid).
Even if you've shown this to the B&G, redesign and show them a new version. Even if they say they love this, they'll love a new one even better.
Professionals who do a lot of albums are headed toward simple albums, featuring the images rather than making a pretty design that looks good. I'm back to using matted albums with white matts quite often, sometimes with a few pagemount pages or images (QB duo). Jerry Ghionis just did an album with one image per page, all square prints, it's a pretty nice album, you can see it here
if you're a DWF member.
Regarding the photography, I think you shoot too tight. You need to add context to your images. Award winning or stunning images are almost never close crops, they're a nice scene, a nice pose, and a great moment. You don't really have any of those. Capture the emotion, if it's not there try to work out how to get them to produce it.
If you want to see a recent album design of mine, check this out
. I'll keep the link/album up for a couple of days.