Thank you for critiques

These two pictures were taken last week. Pls give me some suggestions and critiques.

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Ok, I will give it a shot. #1 is well exposed, sharp and has interesting lighting, but your intended subject – whatever it is – does not pop out. My eyes go all over the image trying to find a key point. Think of exactly what you are visualizing in your mind and compose the photo.

#2 is intriguing. I like the exposure and concept. However, the angled rectangle on the left of the photo that appears to be the wall in the stair case draws my eye from the main subject. Try a crop from where the center pole intersects the top of the frame. I believe that will isolate the woman better.

My $.02.

Larry

I adore 2

My 2 on 2, It's almost a voyeur feel, but I like it

Love #2, and yes I tried to look down her shirt.

TheRoff wrote in post #10796509
Ok, I will give it a shot. #1 is well exposed, sharp and has interesting lighting, but your intended subject – whatever it is – does not pop out. My eyes go all over the image trying to find a key point. Think of exactly what you are visualizing in your mind and compose the photo.

#2 is intriguing. I like the exposure and concept. However, the angled rectangle on the left of the photo that appears to be the wall in the stair case draws my eye from the main subject. Try a crop from where the center pole intersects the top of the frame. I believe that will isolate the woman better.

My $.02.

Larry

Thank you for your suggestion. Actually, the first one is just a coffee shop in an indoor farmer's market, when I walked through, I found the light was so wonderful from the narrow window on the top. Just wanna shot the light at the coffee shop on a lazy sunny Sunday morning. A glance of the life ppl enjoy here.

The second one might not need to cropped it since it will make it feel too tight. I thought some vignette might work.

Angry Dad wrote in post #10798978
Love #2, and yes I tried to look down her shirt.

Me too!

+1 on #2.

Angry Dad wrote in post #10798978
Love #2, and yes I tried to look down her shirt.

Me too...what a bunch of pervs...

Love it tho...

#1 Everything left of the pole is not connected to everything on the right of the pole. See what happens if you crop the pole and everything to the left out. In my eye the people become more central to the image.

#2 Note the bright flash pan or whitish flat element to the left of your subject. In my eye the subject and this pan compete for attention so they become partners in the image. The question becomes "What is the relationship?". I know that sounds silly but they both carry equal visual weight. Since the stair well is heavily textured you might try adding film grain to the pan to reduce it's visual attraction or lower the levels by 3 or 4 stops or more. By doing this the subject may become even more pronounced.

jetcode wrote in post #10804428
#1 Everything left of the pole is not connected to everything on the right of the pole. See what happens if you crop the pole and everything to the left out. In my eye the people become more central to the image.

#2 Note the bright flash pan or whitish flat element to the left of your subject. In my eye the subject and this pan compete for attention so they become partners in the image. The question becomes "What is the relationship?". I know that sounds silly but they both carry equal visual weight. Since the stair well is heavily textured you might try adding film grain to the pan to reduce it's visual attraction or lower the levels by 3 or 4 stops or more. By doing this the subject may become even more pronounced.

Thanks a lot!

jetcode wrote in post #10804428
#1 Everything left of the pole is not connected to everything on the right of the pole. See what happens if you crop the pole and everything to the left out. In my eye the people become more central to the image.

#2 Note the bright flash pan or whitish flat element to the left of your subject. In my eye the subject and this pan compete for attention so they become partners in the image. The question becomes "What is the relationship?". I know that sounds silly but they both carry equal visual weight. Since the stair well is heavily textured you might try adding film grain to the pan to reduce it's visual attraction or lower the levels by 3 or 4 stops or more. By doing this the subject may become even more pronounced.

#2 I might even try to crop his into a square aspect ratio - crop out the left. The spiral staircase, its outer curves defined by railing, would become an inscribed circle within a frame with the center post becoming a diagonal element leading in from the upper left corner. The girl's orientation of the body as well as her left hand on the railing will help carry the eye towards the opposite corner.

Mu Eugene wrote in post #10808031
#2 I might even try to crop his into a square aspect ratio - crop out the left. The spiral staircase, its outer curves defined by railing, would become an inscribed circle within a frame with the center post becoming a diagonal element leading in from the upper left corner. The girl's orientation of the body as well as her left hand on the railing will help carry the eye towards the opposite corner.

Thank you for your suggestion. I had tried, but I found the pic after crop is little bit off balance and gives me a strange feeling. Maybe I just add some vignette to the left. Personally, I am not a fan of 1:1, and also for the pic of 'Rock On Ice', I still like the original work rather than the 1:1 cropped.
Anyway, sincerely appreciated your suggestion.